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"Mom, It's on The Bed. . ." by ~Slivie-Tidus:iconSlivie-Tidus:



I left it on my bed, dear mother,
As far as, my eyes have seen.

It's there, why don't you just look?
Look harder then, it's there!
Not like I buried it in the sea.

There it is on the bed! See!?
Covered up by dark woolen sheets.
Just lift up the covers,
Find what you'll discover . . .

No, that really is just me.
What did you expect there be,
Lying in your daughter's bed?
What fantastic ideas were in your head?
What did you think was in place of me in My bed?

Your very strange mother,
With the ways you gaze through me.
I guess I could understand you,
If you'd just speak with me.
Nope, lips are sealed,
With regretful chains too tight to break.

I've been trying all my life,
But instead we sit, wait on the knife.
What are we waiting for?
The final match and then, your life's score?
Ever thought, that's not enough, I want more?

It feels sometimes like were strangers.
And I don't understand.
I gave you my ideas, dreams in a jar.
My plans, you said you understand.

And I swear.  I love you, that much is true.
But you don't know me Mother,
and because of that I can't know you . . .

I left "me" on the bed, dear Mother
But you never recognized, your little one, was now me.
©2006-2009 ~Slivie-Tidus
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. . . Mom and I are very close, but at the same time were not.. heh.. I should shut up while i'm ahead.. enjoy!

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:iconphoenixlight:
In saying it isn't quite your best concept in conglomerative wholeness, it is easily established as one of your deeper poems on quite the contrary. Written more or less for yourself, and those whom know you best. On the alternate, justified feedback can't really be provided from me, as I can't really say anything. However, if you'd enjoy a little chat over a cup of tea, (or whatever) do try and call sometime (as it would be quite enjoyable, at the least on my behalf); or ring and chime on that thing that costs no dime. Cherio lass!

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My understanding of people isn't dead. It just smells kinda funny.
:icongensanity:
very well done

I like

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:iconslivie-tidus:
Written simply, with deeper meaning.. got it lol... and Yes I would be happy to call you.. or the free way (which I'm doing right now) here's to tea!! *raises cup*

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Everybody keeps wondering what the answer is to "the question"... My wondering is what the hell is the question?
:iconslivie-tidus:
thank you, glad you enjoyed it ^^

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Everybody keeps wondering what the answer is to "the question"... My wondering is what the hell is the question?
:iconslivie-tidus:
and thank you very much for the fav!! It's much apperiacted ^^ I think this is the 4th or 5th fav i've gotten.. all hail the yayness!

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Everybody keeps wondering what the answer is to "the question"... My wondering is what the hell is the question?
:icongensanity:
np, very glad you wrote it :P

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Dreaming of Wacom Days
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:iconapplekid:
Absolutely stellar piece. I wish I could think of something more constructive to say, but I'm honestly at a loss.

Bravo to you.
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thank you for the view and the fav. much appericated..
and yes that happens to me sometimes.. read something and have nothing constructive to say.. lol

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Everybody keeps wondering what the answer is to "the question"... My wondering is what the hell is the question?
:icondalben:
Very nicely done ... Nice flow and it really captures the reader - I think we can all identify with it. I mean though we know our parents and they know us, we don't really "Know" eachother. What we think each (parent and child) should be just gets in the way

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this shared dream of ours - this life, we take it each day as though an infanit number remain. We must remember that each is precious as are the people we meet. for we are here but an instant then gone

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